This is my poem/response to the news article i mentioned in previous post, titled "US citizens locked up as illegal immigrants"
I think towards the end I mix some words up (or at least my understanding of them), but as always, there is work to be done
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The answer to stabilizing the American Economy
is to deport all the illegal immigrants. We begin
with some work raids. Because only illegal immigrants
run and everybody who stays should have their
papers with them. Then we can stop them for
suspicious reasons and ask them about their citizenship.
Operation Wetback intended to gather up illegal residents
and return them to Mexico.
Operation Return To Sender intends to gather up illegal residents
and return them to Mexico.
Inevitably some mistakes will be made.
Mistakes that will cost you a couple days
or years, but with proper proof can be
corrected. These are regretful mistakes
because they were not intended
the feelings of hostility,
being handcuffed to a chair
sense that you don’t belong here
that you must speak proficient English
that you are an American citizen.
2 comments:
I know you call this a commentary and not poetry, pero te faltan palabras for both.
If it is a commentary, it sounds too much like poetry in certain parts and it cuts the commentary feel down too much. If it is poetry it isn't sooth at all. le faltan images and smoothness maybe...
Operation Wetback intended to gather up illegal residents
and return them to Mexico.
Operation Return To Sender intends to gather up illegal residents
and return them to Mexico.
This is the answer to stabilizing the American Economy
deport all the illegal immigrants.
i like if maybe it starts like this...
smoother maybe?
then you can list your other things almost like points
*begin with work raids
Only illegal immigrants run
any body that dosent' run
should have their papers
*Stop them for suspicious reasons
Insert homeland security
talking point here. Say you are
helping them by asking them
where they are from. Just
standard tell me your family's
history quesitons. America
wants to get to know you!
*Some mistakes might be made
These mistakes will cost a
couple of days. but with
proper proof these mistakes can
be corrected.
*These are regretful mistakes
they were not intended to cause
feelings of hostility
Being handcuffed to a chair might lead to a sense that you don’t belong here, that you must speak proficient English that you are an American citizen, but don't worry
WITH PROPER PROFF THIS CAN BE CORRECTED
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